Different text, and grammatical errors. (1,837 views)

[Flourpot.]

Hey.

I am just playing through the game now for the first time and haven't gotten very far yet.
And I kinda already feel that some things could sound better/be more correctly written.
Now English isn't my first language, meaning I am by no means an expert. 
I think it's especially Ricks text that might be bothering me a bit, it's not the grammatical way, but more that I think the text could be different to give a better idea of his character.
Let me give an example.
I just entered the Dullfern forest, and when you first battle him I think what he says is. " Let's see how good you are." Or something along the line of that.
And I immideatly thought that the line. " Let's see what you got." Would fit his character better.
Is that just me, or are others having the same feeling?
If it's just me I will just shut up and go back into my hole heh.

[Saws311]

Jul 19, 2015 9:31:34 GMT 12 Flourpot. said:

Hey.

I am just playing through the game now for the first time and haven't gotten very far yet.
And I kinda already feel that some things could sound better/be more correctly written.
Now English isn't my first language, meaning I am by no means an expert. 
I think it's especially Ricks text that might be bothering me a bit, it's not the grammatical way, but more that I think the text could be different to give a better idea of his character.
Let me give an example.
I just entered the Dullfern forest, and when you first battle him I think what he says is. " Let's see how good you are." Or something along the line of that.
And I immideatly thought that the line. " Let's see what you got." Would fit his character better.
Is that just me, or are others having the same feeling?
If it's just me I will just shut up and go back into my hole heh.

1. Rick is supposed to be a rude character so they don't need to change his sentence
2. Tao lives in Germany so he isn't good at English

[flourpot]

Jul 19, 2015 11:54:38 GMT 12 Saws311 said:

2. Tao lives in Germany so he isn't good at English

I didn't mean it as an insult to anyone's language skills.
My English isn't exactly perfect, so as I said it wasn't to insult anyone.
I simply thought they might like a thread, where if anyone catches a grammatical error they may post it.
I mean when I ever write stories I get beta readers to check my mistakes, so I supposed I assumes it would be the same here.

Now About Rick, I think I didn't explain my reasoning good enough, I love that he is rude.
And I think I forgot to mention I am already hooked on this game, the story is great, the characters AMAZING! And the Fakemons are so d**n cute, I want plussies is all I am saying!
Now I think that line stuck to me because it didn't sound natural, it sounded, to me, a bit forced.
I think it's because just before he says it he says. Something that also contains the word good, then there is a . And then he says the line, I just some other wording would still get the message across and sound more natural.
But it was a bad example, let me give another. In serpentine city you find three children for the lady, all the children says the same thing, I just thought a little change would make it better.
As it is right now it is by no means worse, I simply thought it would make it better.
Oh! Or after the battle with Rodney, his small text right after is " I enjoyed it" I think, and that sounded again a bit forced to me.
I would suggest maybe. " I always enjoy a battle with you."

As I said earlier, I am not trying to get on anyone's bad side, or up into anyone's business.
I just well, this is a suggestion thread and this is my suggestions.

[Tao]

That's a good idea with an own thread for grammatical errors and ideas for different textes.
I will open one. We know that the textes are not the strength of the game, so maybe we can improve them with some forum members.

[hambone]

Jul 20, 2015 20:35:23 GMT 12 Tao said:

That's a good idea with an own thread for grammatical errors and ideas for different textes.
I will open one.

So, have you opened a new thread for grammatical errors and such, or is this the thread for it? In the meantime I'm just gonna leave these here....




Maybe change it to: "Have you ever had a Pokemon Egg?" This woman is in the first house on the right when you enter Brushus Town.


The word, "be" could be taken out. :3 This woman is in the northern part of Goldune City.


Also, I was wondering if you were going to add some sort of message from the Professor or the player's mother when the player attempts to ride their bike indoors like in other Pokemon games.